I am applying for admission to the Ph.D. program in Electrical and Computer Engineering, at the University of California, Berkeley. I present my research experience and study objectives in this statement of purpose. I would like to build on my solid education and experience as an engineer for a Ph. D. degree in computer science at a distinguished university. I wish in particular to be trained at an advanced level in software systems, database systems, applied-AI and knowledge-based systems. My ultimate goal is to become a professor teaching computer science at a Chinese university. I believe that advanced training in a quality graduate program will help me realize my goal.
My father is a chartered accountant and my mother is a banker. During my days at Engineering College I used to go to my father's office and help him manage his portfolio of equities and other financial instruments. This was the time I learnt the first lesson of finance from my father i.e. risk and return are proportionate. In 1998 when I was in the second year the China stock market crashed. But fortunately, my father had a well-diversified portfolio because of which our returns were protected from the downside risk. This was when I learnt the second principle of finance from my father i.e. diversification reduces risk. While I understood these two principles intuitively, it produced in me a strong urge to learn and understand the complex theory behind the working of Finance. This, I believe, was a turning point in my career. I made up my mind to pursue a career in Finance and hence decided to do a Masters program in Business Administration.
As I was finishing college, my mother had both of her hips replaced with artificial ones because all of the cartilage in her hip joints had worn away and it was very painful for her to walk. I found it fascinating that engineers, orthopedic surgeons, and biologists had all worked together to design these artificial joints that completely transform. people's lives by giving them back pain-free mobility, and I knew at that moment that this was an area about which I wanted to learn more. In China these days, university graduates who have not been lucky enough to settle into their dream jobs often look to graduated studies as a way to kill the time that they cannot otherwise spend meaningfully. I am prepared to go against the social conventions by putting on hold a successful research career that promised to be even more successful. With eight years of productive and highly valued practical research behind me, I now would like to revert to a more intellectual life so that I can conduct more theoretical discourses.
When asked how to manage to mask remarkable statues, the French sculptor Auguste Rodin answered, “I choose a block of marble and chop off whatever I don't need.(法国雕塑家罗丹说：“给我一块大理石，把多余的去掉。”)” For me, life is just a block of marble---whether the marble can be turned into a remarkable statue depends on your natural talents, diligence and a sense of duty. During over four years’ my college life, I have been dreaming of being a perfect female researcher so that I can enhance more young girls’ confidence in scientific research and encourage them to promote the development of science as men do. For Knowledge Itself Is Power.This is one of my favorite precepts and at this point in my life when I am about to complete my graduation and my future spreads in front of me like a dream, this adage has never influenced my life more than this before.
For the past three years, my undergraduate education has exposed me to the various sub-fields of Computer Science (CS). However, our syllabus has focused mainly on "traditional" CS topics, such as Operating systems and single-CPU systems. We have had barely a glimpse of the newer technologies that are likely to change the way computing is done in not-so-distant future. The desire to examine such subjects in greater detail is what has prompted me to opt for graduate study. Due to the comprehensiveness of China’s“reform. and open”policies, economics plays an increasingly important role in the development of its global position. As a senior at Beijing University majoring in Economics, I feel that my field is fundamental to the progress of my country. Yet, at the same time, I realize only too well that what I have learned as an undergraduate is far from enough. Therefore, it is my desire to pursue a graduate degree I Economics at your university. If accepted, my intended concentration would be Economic Development and Public Economics
听起来好像很简单，但实际上很多同学的初稿都没有详细地回答问题。皇后大学的‘goals essay’，问的其实很简单“What are your goals at Queen’s and beyond”(对未来在皇后的学习生活有什么目标)，有的同学既没有明确说出自己的goals是做什么或者goals跟在不在皇后无关，对‘beyond’也什么都没说。
国内高中课程主要集中于书面考试这一块，好像提高学生的写作能力是相对欠缺的。专业老师表示十个人中只有一个人的文章是清晰、简洁、有说服力的，也就是3 C’s原则(clear, compelling, and concise)。
“I think you’re better off going with something from the heart … you’re going to hear crickets!”，她也用这样的句式开头“I never thought my sister would find someone who cared about what other people thought as much as she did – until I met Craig.”
BAD: “She is a person I cannot cope with”
GOOD, 但是还不够有信服力: “She is a person with whom I cannot cope”
BEST: “It is behaviour I will not tolerate”
大家都想自己的essay真实可信，甚至有点口语化，但是千万不要太随意。“My goal is to earn a good job”这种就不应该是18岁的人说出来的话了...小孩子才这么说。尽量让你的句子看起来很高级，但还是表达了你自己，换成“I am determined to obtain a challenging and rewarding career”就好多了。
Sir Ken Robinson最著名的“学校谋杀了孩子们的创造性”这个理论被不少人接受。相同的的答案实在是太多太多了，一定要有不同，有自己的特点，但读起来是让人觉得有道理的能接受的。招生官想看的不是一个“统一的答案”，而是“你的答案”。